The Not So Good Friends
At school, on the weekend, whenever, wherever, you would always find them together. Ernie, Frank, and Chris. The three of them met in grade five, and became best friends. They would do everything together and they had a bond of friendship that could never be broken. Ernie and Frank were very similar. They were almost completely the same. Chris was usually the odd man out. When doing partner work in class, Chris wasn't one of the partners. When splitting a sandwich, Chris didn't get a half. This persisted until grade ten and despite Chris feeling left out at times, they were still a great trio of friends. At least Chris thought they were.
One day in class, Chris received a note. The note revealed that Coach Hines wanted Chris to be on the lacrosse team. It continued to say that Chris was to borrow the key from the office that opened the equipment closet, and arrange some lacrosse supplies. Chris was ecstatic. This would be the first team he was on.
During the lunch period, Chris went to the office to get the key. No one was there, so he walked in, snatched the key, then headed off towards the equipment closet. Chris put the key into the lock, thus opening the closet. Out of the corner of his eye, he saw Ernie and Frank enter the room. "Thanks, buddy!" exclaimed Ernie. Chris was confused. Frank then pulled out a bag and began collecting supplies from the previously locked room. That is when Chris realized he had been tricked. Ernie and Frank left the room with the equipment. When the school discovered the missing goods, Chris was the only one to blame. He was suspended for something he didn't do, all because of his "best" friends. (296 words)
Revised:
The Not So Good Friends
They would always be together.
Ernie, Frank, and Chris. The three of them met in grade five, and became
best friends. They did everything together and had a
friendship that couldn't be broken.
However, Chris was usually the odd man out. If two people were needed, Chris wasn't one of them. This
persisted until grade ten.
One day in class, Chris received a note. It said Coach wanted Chris to play lacrosse, and that Chris should borrow the key that opened the equipment closet, and take supplies.
Chris snatched the key and headed
towards the equipment closet. Chris opened the closet. Then, he saw Ernie and Frank
enter the room. "Thanks, buddy!" exclaimed Ernie.
Frank began collecting supplies from the room. That's when Chris realized he had been tricked.
Ernie and Frank took the equipment.
The school discovered the missing goods, and suspended Chris, all because of his "friends."
(149words)
Revised Again:
The Not So Good Friends
Ernie, Frank, and Chris. They did everything together and had great friendship.
Chris was the odd man out. If two people were needed, Chris wasn't one.
Once, Chris received a note. It said Coach wanted Chris to play lacrosse, and Chris should borrow the key to the equipment closet and take supplies.
Chris snatched the key, opened the closet, then saw his friends. "Thanks!" exclaimed Ernie. Frank stole from the closet. Then Chris realized he'd been tricked.
The school discovered the missing goods, and suspended Chris, because of his "friends."
(90words)
Reflection
This piece of writing I did shows manipulation. Chris's friends Ernie and Frank were able to manipulate Chris, and use him to achieve their goal, which was stealing the lacrosse equipment. It also shows how the blame was then but on Chris, suspending him, as Chris realized he had been manipulated.
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